Sunday, September 24, 2006

I'm a Boat


I’m a boat on a lonely shore,
tied by a rope.
With a positive hollow core,
doomed to mope.

The rope is blind it can’t see,

millions of attempts that’ll fail.
What a boat shall be,
if it cannot sail!


Inspired by the talented photographer: Mohammed Sharaf.

6 comments:

antihero said...
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antihero said...

I may have some comments about the music of the second stanza.

bss.. Reem

This is the first time

I stand
I smile
and I applaud

I apologize though for not having tears in my eyes out of appreciation and love of beauty; I'm hardly THAT passionate...
But.. I wish I was so I could show you how amazing this is.

The image you've created of the boat, the rope and the beach. Consistent and concise.
Consistent that the symbols used were not used in contradiction with their significance. I mean a symbol may stand for many thing; now you've used the meaning intended in these symbols carefully as in not to create a confusion between the different meaning of one symbol and the meanings of another. To give one symbol in a written text is to focus one signified aspect of that symbol... if you use more than one aspect without paying attention to the signified aspects represented by the other symbols you've ruined it.
Concise.. is in the fact that you have not elaborated to using so many symbols uselessly.. creating irrelevant images and metaphors for no use but to add to the music or flavor... or just for the sake of using it.
Everything seems in place..

I am Impressed

Keep it rainin'!

Reem said...

Dear God!!
you have no idea how much this means to me!
and yes i agree the music is kinda off in the 2nd stanza, it drove me crazy :p
I'm very pleased, glad there were no tears, a toss back of the head and sm blowing out of smoke would be just perfect ;p
hehehe im so happy, thanks man for ur support.. it means a lot to me..
Go Reem! ;D

No3iK said...

i really like ur style of writing.
very modern and simple.

also i loved the idea of the blog it self.
sorta poetry blended in a photography gallery! which is really amusing.

ill wrapt it with a beautiful quote from Oscar Wilde:
"if you can’t explain it simply, you don’t understand it"

keep it up ;)

Reem said...

hey you :)
thanks a lot for ur sweet words...
i love you, although i have no idea who u r :p

checked ur blog... amazing, sincere, and gets right into the dark rooms of my creepy heart ;D
Go Me and You!

No3iK said...

lol!
i loved the go me and u ;)